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첨삭을 부탁드립니다.

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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading


▶ Topic : Some people argue that parents have the most important role in their child's develonment. However, others say that other factors like TV or peer groups have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

▶ Your Answer :

There are two opinions about influences of the child’s development. First, the most important influence is parent’s behavior and thought. Second, that is other factors like TV or peer groups.

Old people say that the children are mirror of their parents. Son and daughter learn an appropriate behavior of some situations and they think similar to their parents why they listen their mother and father’s talking since born. So, the most important factor of children’s development is parents‘s thinking and behavior.

there are many important factors to influence children’s development except parents. School friends spend a lot of hours together. Teenagers might talk with their friends than mother and father. Children discuss an important decision with friends and worry together about school life. And the important factor of children’s development is TV and mass media. Many children spend to watch TV after school and obtain information through the TV. They tend to copy a TV program.

Although External environment like TV and peer groups influence a lot their growing and development, the most important factor is parents. We frequently saw became good boys and girls who grow up the worst environment. The reason is they have very good parents. Many children follow their parent’s speech and appearance. I saw in my toddler ages what my mother is eligible for my grandmother. I think that respect about old people is the best value until today. Mother’s talking and thinking are very important factor of growing children’s thought.

 In conclusion, Children’s developments are made many environmental factors, the most important influence people are their parents.

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