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Task 2 첨삭 부탁드립니다.

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  • 2017.01.06
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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading


▶ Topic :Central and local governments make a frantic attempt to promote festivals to create a lot of revenue. Some people think this money should be invested in social programmes for the poors.


To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


▶ Your Answer :

In terms of usage of national budget, a number of local government attempt to promote festivals to make a lot of profits. Having said that, some people claim that, government should spend significant parts of their money onto people who are suffering with financial problems. As far as, I am concerned government have to invest money into improving welfare service for poor.

 

Recently, we are living within a society of higher quality of life. Most people are able to enjoy the attractions of tourism industry. Accordingly, local government sponsored national ceremonies and other events. It is positive effect on national income. Having said that, some people who don`t have insufficient money to pay their basic essential items. Such as housing, food and water and so on. Those people hardly considering to surviving from day to day rather than enjoying attractive tourism. According to recent survey conducted by UN(United nation), there are a lot of poor people with good abilities on our society but unfortunately, they give up on education in early age because of poverty. So decision makers encourage scholarship benefits to lower income group for improving their life.

 

Also we are all acutely aware that, most of lower income group can not take opportunities. Such as education, medical treatment. Thus government ans politicians provide institutional strategy like free medical treatment and education.

 

In conclusion, it is inevitable to face this circumstance all over the world. Although national events have enormous benefits and positive effects, it is more important to support poor people and improving the quality of their life.

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