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첨삭부탁드립니다

TASK@2 | 조회 139 | 추천 0
  • 2017.01.07
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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading


▶ Topic : 

Some businesses prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right course of action? Give reasons for your opinion.

▶ Your Answer :

In modern society, it is common to see the places which are banned to smoke by governments or businesses. Regarding this, some argue that the smokers should be able to smoke anywhere. However, I strongly believe that smokers should be smoke at only particular places which was permitted by governments or businesses because of non-smokers’ health and pristine society.

 

To begin with, the majority of citizens do not want to be smoker since they consider their health. However, if some people smoke around them, they will damage their health although they do not want that. In addition, this kinds of indirect smoking is very fatal for non-smokers’ health. According to research conducted by Tokyo University, some children who live with smoking parents have severe health problems due to passive smoking. As the research clearly illustrates, smoking is very harmful not only smokers’ health but also non-smokers’ health including children.

 

On top of that, the increase of smokers is very damaging for our environment. This is because smokers throw the trash such as cigarette on the street, aisle, and so on. In addition, those sorts of garbage engender the disgusting smells by steadily accumulating on the street. For example, in Korea, the government was able to refine the environment of cities by restricting the places where are able to smoke. As the example clearly illustrates, it is essential to limit the smoking areas.

 

In conclusion, the governments and businesses should restrict the smoking areas for keeping other citizens’ health and pristine environment.  

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