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첨삭부탁드립니다.감사합니다.

영어보이 | 조회 11 | 추천 0
  • 2017.01.08
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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading


▶ Topic :

Spending public money to promote healthy lifestyle that leads to an imporved quality of life is better than spending it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?


▶ Your Answer :

There is no doubt that people want to live healthy life in recent years. Some people insist that the government should expend the money that is for people to have well-being lifestyle which is likely to enhance the quality of life. I mostly agree with the statement. However, it is undeniable that it is important for the government that spends it for people who suffer from illness.


One of the merits from well-being lifestyle would be ill-prevention. In detail, the wealthy ways of life such as well-balanced diet and regular exercise, make people not to be sick. As a result of this, they have less risk of diseases and illness. Secondly, people have opportunity costs which come from those who are well. In other words, being well is to assist people save money since they do not need to pay for the hospital. Instead of spending on it, they can use their money to improve the standard of living such as learning, studying, and buying. Therefore, a great deal of money should be provided by the government for those of welfare.

 

However, the government that supports financial aid which is given to the public have helped out people to cure a disease. In detail, there are plenty of the poor who were unable to go to hospital just because they do not have enough money. Consequently, all may die without the treatment.

 

In conclusion, I mostly agree with the opinion that the government needs to spend money on people to get the high quality of life since there are advantages such as ill-prevention and opportunity costs.

 

 

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10613 [Task2] Task 2 첨삭 부탁드립니다! CINDYYY 29 2017.01.10
10612 답글 [Task2] RE:Task 2 첨삭 부탁드립니다! meer 17 2017.01.13
10611 [Task2] 첨삭 부탁드립니다. pana 43 2017.01.09
10610 답글 [Task2] RE:첨삭 부탁드립니다. meer 14 2017.01.14
10609 [Task1] 첨삭 부탁드립니다. 사진 pana 47 2017.01.09
10608 답글 [Task1] RE:첨삭 부탁드립니다. 사진 [1] Soo 23 2017.01.13
10607 [Task2] TASk2 첨삭 부탁드립니다 감사합니다~! cindy7767 34 2017.01.09
10606 답글 [Task2] RE:TASk2 첨삭 부탁드립니다 감사합니다~! Soo 13 2017.01.13
>> [첨삭] 첨삭부탁드립니다.감사합니다. 영어보이 12 2017.01.08
10604 답글 [첨삭] RE:첨삭부탁드립니다.감사합니다. Soo 24 2017.01.13
10603 [첨삭] 첨삭부탁드려요.감사합니다. 영어보이 15 2017.01.08
10602 답글 [첨삭] RE:첨삭부탁드려요.감사합니다. Soo 18 2017.01.13
10601 [첨삭] 첨삭부탁드립니다 TASK@2 40 2017.01.07
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10599 [Task2] TASk2 첨삭 부탁드립니다 감사합니다~! cindy7767 49 2017.01.07
10598 답글 [Task2] RE:TASk2 첨삭 부탁드립니다 감사합니다~! Soo 21 2017.01.13
10597 [Task1] task 1 첨삭부탁드립니다 !! 감사합니다!! cindy7767 49 2017.01.07
10596 답글 [Task1] RE:task 1 첨삭부탁드립니다 !! 감사합니다!! meer 20 2017.01.12
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