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TASk2 첨삭 부탁드립니다 감사합니다~!

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  • 2017.01.09
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■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.
■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading

▶ Topic : In contemporary society, average working hours are getting longer. Although this contributes to economic development, it has had negative social consequences. Do the negative effects outweigh the benefits?

▶ Your Answer :

People have different opinions on whether long working hours have a lot of advantages or not. Some assert that increasing working hours is really beneficial to our economic development, and that people should work as many hours as they can for improving economic growth. However, I strongly believe that there are a lot many drawbacks as average working hours are getting longer. This essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages regarding this issue as well as my personal opinions.

On the one hand, people can attribute economic development to long wokring hours. The research conducted on working hours in many countries has shown that people who are living in Asia work more three hours per day than others who are living in Europe. As a result of this trend, Asian countries have greater production rates that European countries, which helps Asian countries to improve their economic growth. In this regard, it it clearly obvious that the economy can be developed by working many hours.

On the other hand, this trend has also had negative effects on our society. A number of workers are suffering from diseases or syndromes caused by notoriouly long working hours. For example, people are likely to get stress and fatigue when they work much longer. Lots of stress and fatigue from have workload might cuase serious diseases. If many members of companies became sick due to working a lot, it would be harmful for companies as well as economic development for our society. Therefore, I agree with the fact that the desadvantages from long working hours can outweigh the advantages from it.

In conclusion, it is good point that economy can be developled by working many hours at work. However, there are no important things more than workers' health. Thus, I assert that the detremental effects outweigh the benefits. Accroding to this, companies need to consider their workers' working hours.

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